2nd Essay (TMA02) Marked

Sorry for the gap in entries folks. I have had a few things to chew over since the previous entry. I have had my 2nd essay marked, and had a tutorial, at which I was able to get more detailed feedback. It was marked at 55, (a clear pass).

This is a drop from the first essay (64), but for two reason, I am not as worried or downhearted as I was at this time last week. Firstly, my tutor mentioned margin notes as being separate from form PT3, (the form on which a summary explanation of a grading is given). Before she mentioned this, I had not thought to open up my essay from the download, as I thought that this was just a copy of the essay. It is not. It is thee essay with notes inserted by the tutor, which give the specifics of where the good and not so good aspects of the essay are commented upon. I know. What am I like? Secondly, on looking at these notes, I can see exactly how to write better essays. It has been commented that I have understood the question, and that I have made a good fist of the task of answering it. The structure, referencing and evidencing of my answer is where it has lost marks.

Now, for those of you who have studied higher education, it will be a fairly obvious feature of essays not achieving the possible marks, and indeed a blatant example of how to fail altogether. For me it is a positive, since    I seem to be gaining an understanding of the subject and the associated materials. It falls to me now to get better at structuring and presenting this understanding. So it will be more than Social Sciences being learned. Onwards and upwards then, to the next essay, which is in two parts. It would appear that the most important lesson has been learned just in time.

Who are you (this time)?

Hello there from DD101 (intro to social  sciences).

I am on a new strand, called connected lives. It is spread over 3 chapters, and I have just finished the first, and the associated exercises. There are exciting new concepts for me to study and get my head around, and this week it has been all about identity.

Identity seems to have a very complex set of set of overlapping parameters, but each of these can be looked at individually and applied singly or in conjunction. There is personal ID, social ID, marked and unmarked IDs (disturbing). I will write more on these as my studies develop. what I would like to look at is a recent concept/theory of ID, which is being called  'Identity Capital'. This concept theorises along the lines that your personal history/achievments/memories and so on can be worth more in terms of your personal identity than that of someone whose life has been perhaps less "interesting". How can this be judged? What if you have had a long term illness which has excluded you ? Are your identity less worthy then? Consider this also. Your personal ID is  worthless (according to many theories) without the interaction of others. Go climb Everest, or learn to play the sitar, but if I ignore you it won't matter a jot
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=l_FZVD5lsAw .